Peer Evaluation 2

I am going to write about Tuğçe Nur Çakal’s Reflection Task 2a. The paragraph that she wrote is about benefits and harm of technology. I liked it very much because this paragraph reflects the facts. She explained the benefits and harm of the technology very well by giving very good examples. When we do not use technology properly, it affects our relationships in a bad way. However; when we use it properly, it is very useful. I think there is not any outstanding mistake in terms of grammar. She expressed  her opinions very well.

Peer Evaluation 1

I am going to write about Tuğçe Nur Çakal’s Reflection Task 3. She is a jury member of the committee choosing the person of the year and she explains why she wants to choose Lady Gaga. It is a little bit long writing but it is not boring. She says Lady Gaga did not make much contribution to music world but she made a lot of contribution to society and world. I liked the way she explains Lady Gaga’s contribution to society and world. Her grammar is good and sentences are good. I cannot see any outstanding mistake. I liked her paragraph. It is nice.

Reflection Task 2b

I would like to write about a German film called "The Lives of Others". This film is set in communist East Germany, shortly before the fall of the Berlin Wall. At that time, the Stasi, the East German secret police, used to spy on all kinds of people. The two main characters in the film are a playwright called Dreyman and a Stasi spy called Weisler, whose job it is to keep Dreyman under 24 hour surveillance. Weisler is supposed to be reporting back to his superiors at the Stasi in order to discredit the playwright. However, he develops a strong sympathy for the playwright and his girlfriend, and determines to protect them by not reporting anything significant. The scenes in the film where it cuts from the colourful and interesting lives of Dreyman and his friends to the lonely attic where Weisler is sitting really show the contrast between the two men. The film is shot in such a way that it makes you believe you are also spying on Dreyman, it even made me feel a bit guilty!
I like this film because it has fascinating, 3-dimensional characters, and also the plot has plenty of twists. Right up until the end of the film, we are left guessing how it could possibly end. It is also very thought-provoking because it makes you wonder how many people working for the Stasi actually did protect the people they were spying on.
As for the message it gives, I would say the main message is that we can find kindness and humanity in the most unexpected of places. The film makes us realise that nothing is ever black and white! The film also serves as a warning about the dangers of an oppressive, paranoid regime and is perhaps quite pertinent in this current age of mass surveillance.
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Reflection Task 2a

In our society today, there are many health issues. People are choosing fast food more, since there are so many fast food restaurants. People aren't even thinking about what food they put in their mouthes. Everybody needs to realize that the more fat and cholesterol they put into their bodies, the slower their heart will beat, and that will lead to shorter lives. Some people realize they are unhealthy and set their minds to eat healthier, but the fats and cholesterol in the food is sucking them back in.
One solution, would be to offer a bigger variety of fruits, vegetables, grains, and meats that aren't very red. This would help because if there was a bigger variety of all those healthy foods, and less junk food, then families would start eating right because there wouldn't be enough junk.
Another idea would be to put a chart of the food pramid and also have health articles in the newspaper about how bad junk food is affecting people and all the healthier foods we could be eating. Alot of people read the newspaper and that would help out alot. Also, health charts could be in stores on some of the walls to know what to buy to become healthier.
Another idea, would be to replace some of the fast food restaurants with restaurants that serve salads and healthy subs. I do have to admit that people don't always have time to go home and get something healthy to eat, so they go to McDonald's and Burger King. And, have you ever noticed that if you take out the "s" in fast, it becomes fat food. Having junk food is bad for you but having, maybe, once every two weeks, then that would be ok because you wouldn't be having a lot of it.
I'm sure that not many people see health issues in food like I do. But, it is a big issue. We don't have to ban "fat foods", but we can at least limit them, making for a healthier diet. That way, everyone will have a long, happy and healthy life.

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Reflection Task 3

I think the person of the year should be Rihanna because Rihanna is a huge pop star all over the world and has been for over 13 years. Rihanna is a pop star because of her unique voice and fabulous songs. However, this is not the only reason. She has made so many number 1 hits, she has the most liked page on facebook, millions of Youtube views on nearly all of her videos. Also, she is famous because she knows which music genre suits her voice, she knows how to sing to suit her voice, she knows how to write an excellent song and finally, she knows which of her songs will make it to number 1 and which will not. These are the main characteristics of being a pop star, and Rihanna has ticked all the boxes, in my eyes. In 2003, at the age of 15, Rihanna got a big break when one of her friends introduced her to a music producer known as Evan Rogers, who was on holiday in Barbados with his wife. Evan, along with his work partner, Carl Sturken, helped Rihanna record songs in America. These songs were then sent to various recording companies. One song that Rihanna had recorded was sent to Jay-Z, a famous rapper, who eventually signed her to Def Jam Records. After Jay-Z heard her sing, he was extremely convinced that she had great potential and could become extremely successful in the music industry. Today, Rihanna is one of the most famous singers in the world and is known by nicknames such as RiRi, Caribbean Queen and The Barbados Babe. Rihanna changed the world by singing what she wanted and what was going on in her head. She also became a huge teenage idol because of her singing and fashion and what she did for charities, for example, she donated money to children all over the world and she helped the unprivileged. I think Rihanna changed the world for the better.

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Free Reflection 2

                                                      My Favourite Movie

My favorite movie is "A Walk To Remember". This is my favorite movie because it deals with real life issues, like some of the most important things in life such as: love, relationships, and most important, who your real friends are. "A Walk To Remember is about a girl named Jamie (Mandy Moore) who is the daughter of a minister who becomes ill. During high school Jamie doesn't have very many friends but is in a lot of activities and through that she meets a reckless boy named Landon. Landon got into some trouble which made the principal force him into being in a play for the drama club. Landon Played a lead role as did Jamie, even though they didn't hang out in the same crowd of friends when Landon needed help with his lines in the play he turned to Jamie to help him out. One of the first things she told Landon was for him to promise that he wouldn't fall in love with her. But that is a promise that he did not keep. Jamie finally told Landon that she had cancer and the treatment stopped working so she didn't have very much time to live. Jamie had this list of accomplishments that she wanted to make before she passed. The number one thing was to get married at the same church that her mother and father was married in. Landon made all of her dreams come true. But unfortunatelly her cancer became worse and she died. I would recommend this movie to anyone who likes heart touching stories, I liked it and would watch it a million times a day if I could.

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Parallelism

Here are the corrected version of the sentences that have parallelism mistakes.

Part 1

1-      My friends are neither anxious to see the items in the museum nor are happy about the admission price.

2-      At my training session, I was not only taught how to work the register but also how to treat the customers.

3-      The doctor promised neither to cause pain during the procedure nor to leave a scar.

4-      Bert will meet us either at the restaurant or at the taxi stand.

Part 2

1-      The understudy had bright green eyes, a great mass of blonde hair and red face.

2-      When winter comes the Joneses will have to find either a warmer house or a wood stove.

3-      When Moe was in high school, his parents spent a good deal of time not only helping him with his homework assigments but also participating in school activities with him.

4-      It is beter to be happy than to be sad.

5-      The word left means “deceitful” in Italian, “awkward” in German, “malicious” in Spanish and “sneaky” in Russian.

6-      The contract was illegible, lenghty and awkward.

7-      Thinking that you can do anything is deceiving yourself.

8-      Aspiring actors go to Hollywood to become stars and to make money.

9-      The tourists amused themselves by playing shuffleboard, watching plays and going to trendy restaurants in center of the city.

10-  Before you order anything, you should check not only the purchasing agent but also the conroller.

11-  The radiologist examined the MRI both carefully and competently.

12-  Please return the medical records either to Dr. Jones or to Dr. Maclntyre.

13-  This sofa is better for beauty, for appereance and for comfort.

14-  Succeeding at something is not necessarily the same as getting what you need.

15-  The process seemed to Beth both boring and annoying.